Comments on: The Malcontentment Circle http://mysticsmuses.wordpress.com/2008/06/05/the-malcontentment-circle/ "How can I lose faith in the justice of life, when the dreams of those who sleep upon feathers are not more beautiful than the dreams of those who sleep upon the earth?" - Khalil Gibran Sat, 05 Dec 2009 03:59:50 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 By: faith786 http://mysticsmuses.wordpress.com/2008/06/05/the-malcontentment-circle/#comment-263 faith786 Fri, 02 Jan 2009 13:56:42 +0000 http://mysticsmuses.wordpress.com/?p=68#comment-263 Happy Birthday. Nice day to have it--during break. I like the idea of repeating the ending phrase into the next line. I might try doing it in a poem soon! Happy Birthday. Nice day to have it–during break.

I like the idea of repeating the ending phrase into the next line. I might try doing it in a poem soon!

]]> By: Le Mystique http://mysticsmuses.wordpress.com/2008/06/05/the-malcontentment-circle/#comment-262 Le Mystique Thu, 01 Jan 2009 19:32:00 +0000 http://mysticsmuses.wordpress.com/?p=68#comment-262 Well I would like to make use of my poetic license for the time being ;). But thanks anyways both of you. Chill up... Its my bday today... Happy bday to me :) Well I would like to make use of my poetic license for the time being ;) .
But thanks anyways both of you. Chill up… Its my bday today…

Happy bday to me :)

]]> By: mp http://mysticsmuses.wordpress.com/2008/06/05/the-malcontentment-circle/#comment-259 mp Thu, 01 Jan 2009 16:18:25 +0000 http://mysticsmuses.wordpress.com/?p=68#comment-259 With all due respect, Faith786, I don't think "Let's leave all this cajole" makes sense. And as for Hughes and that specific quotation ("bullets by"), that makes sense. Everything in context makes sense. This doesn't. I stand by what I said earlier. I would still suggest a rephrase but as the poet, Irfan, it's entirely up to you. : ) With all due respect, Faith786, I don’t think “Let’s leave all this cajole” makes sense. And as for Hughes and that specific quotation (“bullets by”), that makes sense. Everything in context makes sense. This doesn’t. I stand by what I said earlier.

I would still suggest a rephrase but as the poet, Irfan, it’s entirely up to you. : )

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